Ineptshieldmaid (
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2009-06-05 11:18 am (UTC)
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Lovely, but:
1. you have spacing problems in the last part of 'the storm' and the first part of 'after the storm' - two-line gaps instead of one
and
2. They sent landsmen below deck during the storm, and that included Caspian and Edmund.
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1. you have spacing problems in the last part of 'the storm' and the first part of 'after the storm' - two-line gaps instead of one
and
2. They sent landsmen below deck during the storm, and that included Caspian and Edmund.