I like it! Took me a moment to realise Shan wasn't human, but it was easy and comfortably done. I can feel the cold air, and I like the pack's interaction with Sig's tribe; mutual dependancy.
My only real complaint is that it's not clear to me how the werewold transformations work; perhaps you'll get to it later, but I'm a bit confused - clearly, they can change at will, but there's also a time when they must change and... it's not a problem yet, but as the story goes on, I think you should make it clearer soon.
Also, one line looks incomplete: He feels mildly uncomfortable, but The forest thins quickly,
I also have another comment, but I'm asking that in a PM. Should be in your inbox in a few minutes.
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Date: 2008-09-24 11:38 pm (UTC)My only real complaint is that it's not clear to me how the werewold transformations work; perhaps you'll get to it later, but I'm a bit confused - clearly, they can change at will, but there's also a time when they must change and... it's not a problem yet, but as the story goes on, I think you should make it clearer soon.
Also, one line looks incomplete:
He feels mildly uncomfortable, but
The forest thins quickly,
I also have another comment, but I'm asking that in a PM. Should be in your inbox in a few minutes.